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The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata.

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The
climo
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climb
 line graph illustrates the information in
city
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the city
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 of
Kalkota
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Kolkata
 about the secondary sediment and temperature of each month.
Overall
, during
this
 one period, May remained the biggest index with 32
degree
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, with all eleven other
monthes
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months
 much less on them.
In
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July
was
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 the highest sedimentation and the indicator
340
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 mm, from the graph
seen
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 that fallout starts from January with 25 mm and
rise
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rises
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 from
may
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May
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 to July and slowly
decreasing
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,
his
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the lowest precipitation was 1 mm. It's seen that from the diagram
also
 the temperature
is rise
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and
decrease
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 after
september
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September
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,
this
 all happens after winter and the rate decreases before the start of winter. In terms of temperature, the average is approximately 23 Celsius in a year. Despite July having the most rainy days, May accounted for the hottest month at 30 Celsius.
Additionally
, December and January comprised the coolest days have 20 Celsius.
While
 temperatures stay roughly the same for four months from July to October just under 30,
following
this
 trend, experienced a decline in November at 25.
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task achievement
Make sure to proofread your essay for spelling and grammatical errors. For example, 'Kalkota' should be 'Kolkata,' and 'monthes' should be 'months.'
coherence cohesion
Develop a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your essay. This will improve the overall structure and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your paragraph structure. Clearly divide the information about temperature and rainfall into separate paragraphs for better readability and focus.
task achievement
Provide more specific data from the graph to support your points, such as mentioning the exact temperature for months other than May, or how the temperature decreases after September.
task achievement
You have made a good attempt to describe both the temperature and rainfall patterns in Kolkata.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure of your essay follows a logical flow, moving from an introduction to discussion of temperature and rainfall.

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