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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The presented table compares data about the
the
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number of international travel in 4 different years( 1990,1995,2000, and 2005) in 5 various districts per million.
Overall
, The figure of people who had international travel increased;
moreover
, all regions except America had
rose
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 trend in the
periodic
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 of 15 years.
According to
 the chart, America, which was the first one in 1990, had a 680.5, but the trend reduced significantly to 113.2 in the
last
 year. The second one was
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European
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that
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 had 280.2 at the beginning;
then
this
 number climbed moderately to 400.2 in 2005;
furthermore
,
catched
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 on the first level. The third one was Asia and the
pacific
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, which had the largest society, at the
beginng
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beginning
 had 60.2, and
this
 amount
had
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incresed
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increased
owervelmingly
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overwhelmingly
 to 135 in 2005. The diagram demonstrates Africa and
Middle
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 West respectively had not only the smallest figure but
also
 grew
up
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slightly because
in
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 the start Africa had 18.2.
Finally
,
this
 amount reached 28.7.
In addition
, the number of Middle West nearly the
helf
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half
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Africa.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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