You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
The presented table compares data about the
the
number of international travel in 4 different years( 1990,1995,2000, and 2005) in 5 various districts per million.
Remove the redundancy
apply
Overall
, The figure of people who had international travel increased; moreover
, all regions except America had rose
trend in the Add an article
a rose
periodic
of 15 years.
Replace the word
period
According to
the chart, America, which was the first one in 1990, had a 680.5, but the trend reduced significantly to 113.2 in the last
year. The second one was who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
European
Fix the agreement mistake
Europeans
that
had 280.2 at the beginning; Correct pronoun usage
which
then
this
number climbed moderately to 400.2 in 2005; furthermore
, catched
on the first level. The third one was Asia and the Correct your spelling
caught
pacific
, which had the largest society, at the Capitalize word
Pacific
beginng
had 60.2, and Correct your spelling
beginning
this
amount had
Unnecessary verb
apply
incresed
Correct your spelling
increased
owervelmingly
to 135 in 2005.
The diagram demonstrates Africa and Correct your spelling
overwhelmingly
Middle
West respectively had not only the smallest figure but Correct article usage
the Middle
also
grew up
slightly because Change preposition
apply
in
the start Africa had 18.2. Change preposition
at
Finally
, this
amount reached 28.7. In addition
, the number of Middle West nearly the helf
of the figure of Correct your spelling
half
help
the
Africa.Correct article usage
apply
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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