In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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it is widely claimed that printed prints like
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and
books
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will no longer be purchased in the near future, others argue that
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people
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prefer to read
it
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them
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through online
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platforms
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since it is free of
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. The reasons why I disagree with the statement will be elaborated on in
this
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essay.
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with, it may
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sensible for some to believe that the extinction of a printed medias could
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soon.
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emergence of
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internet
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that
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a conventional types
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conventional types
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of
media
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believing it helps people in saving costs of retrieving
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information
.
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; an online news website
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that
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you can look
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apply
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up on the
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in a single click without spending a single
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while
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buying a daily newspaper could cost more than that. Many opponents of
this
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that reading online is not a free
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,
instead
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, it is an extra alternative
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of expenses of the
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in
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today's
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world. To simply explain, nothing in
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globalization world is money-free,
that is
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why we have
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internet
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billing added up
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to
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our monthly expenses
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water and electricity bills.
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the services provided online like
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is
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are
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also
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charged at the same rate
of
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as
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printed
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one
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. Only the intro chapter of a book is free as a sample in order to hook up the reader to buy the book.
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, I personally argue in favour of people
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favor
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reading offline
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seeing that it
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the
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sense of interaction more than online
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apply
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one
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. In
this
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respect, there is
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evident
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showing that
majority
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the majority
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of people in
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society opted for
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printed books
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books
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over online
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one
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as
it
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they
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involved
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nostaglic
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nostalgic
senses
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as flipping pages and scents of the inks that contributed to
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particular books
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books
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while
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the electronic
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was
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absent
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this mentioned stimulus
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. In summary,
although
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it is undeniable that
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internet
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the internet
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has been disrupted in
a
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apply
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media
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fields
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on
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in
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retrieving data for free sometimes, I am of the opinion that online
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cannot completely substitute
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offline
one
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as it
just
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is just
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another costly alternative ways
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another costly alternative way
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of getting information in
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internet
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world in order to
gaining
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real updates.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt well and includes relevant points. However, some ideas could be developed further for clarity and depth. For example, when discussing how online media isn't free, you could have expanded more on the hidden costs and their impact on consumer choices.
general
Pay more attention to grammatical accuracy. There are several instances of incorrect word forms and verb tenses, as well as some awkward phrasing. Additionally, make sure to use articles ('a', 'an', 'the') correctly.
general
Try to use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to make your writing more engaging. This will also help to convey your arguments more effectively.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which effectively frame your arguments. This is one of the strong points of your essay.
supported main points
You made good use of examples to support your arguments, such as the reference to the cost comparison between online news websites and printed newspapers.
logical structure
Your essay shows a good grasp of the topic and your arguments are logically structured. Each paragraph has a clear main idea and develops it adequately.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
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  • internet
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