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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The two pictures above depict the comparison in Nelson
city
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 from different times which is 2000 and today. On the first map, there are
few
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a few
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 sites,
such
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 as
old
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an old
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market
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, train station, university and trees. Nowadays,
the
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apply
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Nelson
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city
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City
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 has been developed with many buildings and some of them
got
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 rebuilt. The new buildings like
residence
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residences
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, shopping
centre
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, new covered
market
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, bars and clubs,
restarurant
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restaurants
restaurant
, and new
shop
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shops
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 have been constructed. Not only that, the
city
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centre
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 has facilitated with four
bycycles
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bicycles
 to
used
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. People can use it by rent systems.
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, the road is only for pedestrians. Afterwards, the
restaurant
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restaurants
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also
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 the bars and clubs are located
at
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on
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left
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the left
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 and right
the
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of the
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 port. Unfortunately, the trees are not available anymore.
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, a significant change has been made by
build
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building
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 new places.
Furthermore
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, some places
got
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were
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 relocated. Beforehand, the train station and old
market
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 are
at
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on
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 the left side. Now, the old
market
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 changed
at
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to
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 the right side of
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city
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the city
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centre
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 and
train
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the train
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 station
at
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to
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 the north of
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city
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the city
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centre
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, market, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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