meals consumed by the USA population focusing on the three typical nutritions comprising sodium, saturated fat and added sugar found in each meal.

The provided graphical illustrations offer insights into the meals consumed by the
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population focusing on the three typical nutritions comprising
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar found in each meal. The overarching trend highlighted by the diagrams indicates a disproportionate relationship between the nutrients in each meal.
Sodium
and Saturated fat were two of the nutritions that have nearly similar percentages in each meal with a moderate difference
while
the added sugar in each meal contained distinct proportions in each meal. For
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similar proportions of
Sodium
and Saturated fat, Dinner was the meal that
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both of these nutritions in the highest percentage with 43% and 37% respectively. Followed by lunch with nearly
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of
Sodium
and 26% of Saturated fat.
Then
there are similar proportions of
sodium
in breakfast and snacks with 14%
while
there was 21% and 16% in
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Saturated fat. The added sugar was mostly found in snacks with 42%,
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the
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meals on dinner, lunch and breakfast contain nearly the same amount with just under a quarter and around one
fifths
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and less than
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respectively.
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