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The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of gorillas in the wild between 1990 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of gorillas in the wild between 1990 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the changes in the
population
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 of
gorillas
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 held outside captivity in seven African countries from 1990 to 2015.
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, all seven countries experienced a downtrend in the number of
gorillas
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 in the wild.
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, Uganda saw a considerable drop in their gorilla
population
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,
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 Nigeria and Angola showed a slight increase throughout the period. Uganda saw the biggest drop in the
population
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 of wild
gorillas
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 from around 8,000 in 1990 to 7,500 in 2015.
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 trend was seen in
Central
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 African Republic, their
population
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 declined from about 6,000 in 1990 to less than 5,000 in 2015. Nigeria and Angola saw a slight rise in the number of untamed
gorillas
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. The figure rose from approximately 2,500 to nearly 2,600 which was an increase of 100
gorillas
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.
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,
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 trend was similar for Angola which experienced a small increase of about 90 wild
gorillas
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at the end
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 of 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, gorillas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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