Some people think that exams are a good way of assessing a student's level. Other people believe that they put unnecessary pressure on young learner and tell us very little about their acutal ability. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

The debate about
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student
should take
exams
as a way to assessment of their
knowlage
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knowledge
. or if it is just an extra
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pressure
and
wont
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won't
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really help
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determine
the actual level of the young students is a
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multifaceted
.
Although
people who agree with the
exams
think that taking
exams
would make the students study more regularly ,
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believe
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that it is
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better
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to
avaluate
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evaluate
their whole work
durin
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during
the academic year . On the one hand,
Indviduals
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individuals
who agree with the
exams
in place as an
asessment
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assessment
tool , believe that it
encarage youn
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encourages young
student
to study on
daily
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a daily
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or weekly basis
becuse
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because
they are
a ware
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aware
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of their
exams
dates so they need to
prepar
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prepare
for it and
as a result
the score high .
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student
achieve
a
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apply
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higher
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grades
grade
in their
exams
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because
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study regularly .
However
, I believe
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not
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enough .
On the other hand
, people who are not fun of
this
idea , think that the hard work during the whole year
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might
be compromised by some
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sircomstanses
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circumstances
that could
affects
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the
studens
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students
student
on the exam date so they might not get the result they wished for ,
as a
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result,
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they would feel disappointment
becuse
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because
their efforts has been lost.
For instance
,If the
youn
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young
learner
got
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gets
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sick and
missed
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misses
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his exam he is marked as fail some times with no chance to retake the exam soon ,
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even though
he is in fact a good
student
. In conclusion ,
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although
tests
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an
accebtable
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acceptable
methoud
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method
for some to find
about
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out about
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the
student
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progress
becuse
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because
they have been
studing continuosliy
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studying continuously
. I believe that
student
should be assessed
base
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based
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on their whole
years
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activities as
this
would give them
chance
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a chance
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to
proprly
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probably
being
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be
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asessed
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assessed
if they havent done their
exams
for some
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reasons
reason
.
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