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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
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The pie
chart
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 provides a breakdown of the venues where
dance
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classes
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 are held,
while
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 the bar
chart
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 illustrates the three types of
dance
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classes
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 attended by young individuals in a specific Australian town.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 private studio has the highest percentage. It can be seen that, in ballet and tap
dance
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classes
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, the number of under 11 members
are
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is
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 more than the group between 11
andin
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and
and in
 a town in Australia are currently attending. Looking at the pie
chart
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,
the
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apply
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private
studio
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studios
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 make up nearly 50% which is the highest data.
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 nearly one-fifth of
dance
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classes
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 take place in community halls and other locations, college-based studios are the least chosen location, comprising only one-tenth of the total. Looking at the bar
chart
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, there are approximately 300
paticipants
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participants
 who
under
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are under
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 11 in ballet
dance
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classes
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 which is
a
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half
compare
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compared
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 with the members who
from
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are from
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 11 to 16 years old in
same
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the same
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classes
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. A similar pattern is observed in the numbers of these two age cohorts opting for tap dancing, albeit less pronounced, with approximately 450 younger
students
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 compared to 420 older
students
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.
This
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 contrasts starkly with modern
dance
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classes
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, where just over 500
students
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 in the 11-16 age group participate, compared to only 300 younger
students
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, dance, classes, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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