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The line graph illustrates the participation of countrywide athletes in the Winter Olympic Games from 1988 to 2004.

The line graph illustrates the participation of countrywide athletes in the Winter Olympic Games from 1988 to 2004.
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The line graph illustrates the participation of countrywide athletes in the Winter Olympic Games from 1988 to 2004. In general, it is evident that the number of Summer Olympians was the greatest
at the end
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 of the period,
while
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 the number of Winter Olympians experienced a dramatic decline despite
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initial growth.
According to
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 the line graph, there were 6
million
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 participants who engaged in the 1988 Winter Olympics and
this
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 figure reached a peak of 8
million
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 in 1992 before plummeting by 5
million
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 8 years later.
Then
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, it witnessed a gradual fall to only 2
million
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 in 2004. As regards the pie chart, the 2004 Olympics recorded the highest number of participants, at 9
million
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. Meanwhile, the years 2000 and 1988 had the second-highest (7
million
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) and third-highest (5
million
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) attendance levels, respectively.
By contrast
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, there were significantly fewer competitors in 1996 and 1992, with the former figure being 3
million
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 compared to only 2
million
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 of the latter.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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