A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child's development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.
Choosing
a
right Correct article usage
the
gift
for a child
can be a difficult task as you always look for a thing that not
only good Add a missing verb
is not
in
entertaining but Change preposition
for
also
contribute
Correct subject-verb agreement
contributes
in
some Change preposition
to
growth
. In this
essay, I will illustrate about
a Change preposition
apply
gift
that is
good for children
development and I will Change noun form
children's
also
illustrate reasons.
To begin
with, I will always choose a pet as a gift
that helps a child
with an
Correct article usage
apply
overall
growth
along with
daily happiness. A pet like
Add a hyphen
pet-like
dog
or a cat at homes
makes Fix the agreement mistake
home
huge
difference Add an article
a huge
while
toddlers growth
. Replace the word
grow
Additionally
, pets play with kids and help them to have an immense of physical exercise, moreover
, pets are the only living gift
you can buy for someone where
love for it will never Correct word choice
whose
be
fade. Unnecessary verb
apply
For example
, when i
was young, my father brought a Change the capitalization
I
dog
for me and i
used to play a lot with him and Change the capitalization
I
love
for her is everlasting.
Correct pronoun usage
my love
In addition
, there are numerous benefits of gifting a pet such
as a dog
, a cat or other. Firstly
, children gets
emotionally attached to them and the care they show towards them makes a Change the verb form
get
child
responsible. Kids loves
to provide them Change the verb form
love
food
, Change preposition
with food
water
and play with them, Correct word choice
and water
this
gives them extreme happiness which helps them to stay away from stress and education burden. For instance
, at my school age a few years ago, after arriving to
home Change preposition
apply
i
used to play with my Change the capitalization
I
dog
and i
felt Change the capitalization
I
relex
and fresh afterwards.
Correct your spelling
relaxed
relax
To sum up
, I would like to assert that, i
will always Change the capitalization
I
chooses
pets to Change the verb form
choose
gift
for the best and overall
child
development as it carries huge
beneficial impact on a Correct article usage
a huge
child
Change noun form
child's
growth
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introduction conclusion
In the introduction, try to avoid repetition and provide a clearer thesis statement. For example, 'Choosing a gift for a child can be challenging, but a pet can contribute significantly to their development through emotional bonding, responsibility, and physical activity.'
introduction conclusion
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complete response
The essay presents a clear argument for why gifting a pet can benefit a child's development.
relevant specific examples
The inclusion of personal examples adds credibility and relatability to the essay.
supported main points
The points about emotional attachment, responsibility, and stress relief are well-explained and relevant to the topic.
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