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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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The floorplan shows how a building has changed from 1958 to the present day. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that the building has served both commercial and residential purposes with the only area remaining unchanged being the kitchen. At present, the flower shop has a more open layout relative to when it was an apartment and
office
. In 1958, the building was used as an
office
 with a meeting
room
 in the top left
corner
 of the floorplan, an assistant’s and secretary’s
office
 below there and a toilet in the bottom left
corner
. In 1985, the meeting
room
 was extended and turned into a living
room
 and a large bathroom and shower took the place of the offices and toilet. The florist shop contained a gift card
room
 in the top left,
above
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a large open space for flowers and a play area in the bottom left
corner
. On the right side, the kitchen in the top
corner
 was unaltered across all iterations of the ground floor. In comparison, there was a manager’s
office
 on the
right hand
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 side and a reception area in the bottom
corner
. These spaces were allocated for bedrooms in the apartment and are now an
office
 and additional space for flowers.
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Your essay does a good job of describing the changes in the floor plan over time. Ensure that each paragraph introduces and closes on a strong point to enhance clarity and engagement.
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The task achievement is commendable as you have given a comprehensive response. Adding more specific details can further elevate your answer.
task achievement
Excellent use of specific details to compare changes over the different years.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is well-maintained, with clear divisions between the different time periods discussed.

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