The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the changes that have
been
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occurred to a central library's floor plan in the
last
two decades.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the library
have
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become more
child friendly
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and incorporated cutting-edge technology. Upon entering, the central
area
priviously
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previously
occupied by tables and chairs is now turned into an open pathway. To the right of
this
area
, the
room
formerly used for adult non-fiction
books
now accommodates adult fiction
books
,
in addition
to an information desk and self-service machines. To the right of
entrance
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, the former
enguiry
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enquiry
desk now houses a cafe. In front of
this
coffeeshop
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, a computer
room
has taken
place
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the place
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of the
privious
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previous
reading
room
.
Additionally
, the
area
formerly designated for all reference
books
now contains all reference
books
.
Finally
,
at the end
of the passage, there used to be a children's
books
room
to the right.
This
particular
area
has been replaced with a lecture
room
. To the left, the space that incorporated CDs, videos, and computer games, is now allocated for storytelling events, sharing space with children's fiction
books
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, room, books with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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