The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
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The graph charts here illustrate the portion of
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the house
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house
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houses
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used
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that used
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appliances
such
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as washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vaccume
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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in contrast
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to the total
hour
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hours
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spent in a week for chores in one country in the span of 99 years from 1920 to 2019. The use of
refrigerator
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was virtually zero prior to 1920,
however
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, from 1920 to 1960 almost 90%
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house
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houses
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acquered
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acquired
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and in the next two
decade
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decades
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it reached 100% and it continued to be at that mark till 2019.
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of
vaccume
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, 30%
houses
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of houses
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already had them, but
its
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their
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use experienced a sharp rise and by 2000, it reached
100
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the 100
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% mark, which remained till 2019. In comparison, almost 40%
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of household
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household
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households
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had washing
machine
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machines
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by the start of the graph, it continued to grow to 70% by 1960.
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, from 1960 to 1980, its
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usage
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dropped a bit. In the later
years
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years,
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it regained its place in the house to around 60%
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and stayed at that
upto
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up to
2019.
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, people used to spend 50 hours a week
to do
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houseworks
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housework
. It sharply declined to 20 hours by 1960, followed by
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a gradual
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decrease to around 10 hours by 2019.
To sum up
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, the use of electrical
appliance
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appliances
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experienced
upward
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an upward
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trend in all
category
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categories
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, where the the amount of time
went
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spent
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for
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housework followed a downward trend.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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