You have just bought some clothing online and you are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the cloth from. In your email Give details of the purchase Describe the problem Explain why you need a replacement urgently

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in the concern of receiving an unsatisfied product which I want to return immediately.
Last
week, I purchased a mini wallet on sale from
coach.com
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the coach.com
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website with order number WCO178
,
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apply
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and paid
full
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the full
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amount of the product with my credit card even
I
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though I
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have
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had
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a
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an
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option to pay it in instalments. The issue with
this
product doesn't have a front zip which I think
is
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was
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broken or missed during manufacturing time, which not only affects its appearance but
also
decreases its function
beacuse
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because
this
purse doesn't have any other zip. I would really appreciate your assistance
to replace
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in replacing
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it as soon as possible,
hopefully
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hopefully,
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before
this
week ends
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weekends
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as I
was
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am
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planning to go
to
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on
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a trip next week. I am sending you
this
parcel back
along with
receipt
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the receipt
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and order number and your help would be greatly helpful. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours Sincerely, Amanjot Kaur.
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task achievement
The letter provides a complete response to the prompt but could benefit from elaborating on certain points, such as how the broken zip impacts usability more specifically.
coherence cohesion
Consider using clearer transitions between ideas to improve the logical flow of the letter. For example, using phrases like 'Additionally,' or 'Moreover,' to guide the reader through your points.
task achievement
The letter has a clear and polite tone, which is suitable for a letter of complaint.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are generally well-structured and each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making the letter easy to follow.
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