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Some people think that e-books are better to be used for education in order to go paperless. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages. Give your own opinion.

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It is argued that some individuals favour
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electronic books over paper books.
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 e-books benefit the environment and are easy to use;
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, they sometimes have problems with longevity or the ability to possess one.
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 essay will discuss both views, and I will argue that both views have valid points. On the one hand, some schools and universities prefer students to use e-books over paper to study as it is environmentally friendly. Promoting the
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 of devices to study a specific subject, can have a positive impact on the environment and
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 decrease deforestation.
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, it is
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 convenient and portable because students no longer have to carry heavy booklets that can negatively impact their health.
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, studies have shown, that thirty
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 of schools in Germany have now switched to using i-pads, and laptops because of
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 positive impact on the student's
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, it is evident that there are shortcomings to advancements in technology. Perhaps the most significant drawback could be the longevity.
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 devices could be spectacular in the way they work, their battery life does not
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 for a long time and may often require charging.
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, in some cases, with the ever-rising cost of living, the expense of having e-books can be prohibitive.
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,
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 case was seen during COVID-19 were education switched to online platforms and families were forced to provide their young ones with tablets that were expensive. In conclusion, there are advantages to cutting down the use of paper because it promotes sustainability and is beneficial for the student's health in the long run.
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, there are
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 shortcomings to utilising e-devices as they may be costly and they may regularly need to be charged. It appears to be that the
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benefits
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 technological advancement over papers
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 have advantages that help make the life of individuals easier and disadvantages that can prevent people from using them in education.

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Try to make your thesis statement more definitive. Instead of arguing that both views have valid points, state your position clearly.
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While you have presented clear ideas, be careful with some minor grammatical issues and ensure to keep a consistent register throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs and within sentences. This will enhance the flow of your essay.
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You have provided specific examples to support your points which strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Your main points are well-supported and coherent with the topic.
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