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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now,and plans for its developement. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now,and plans for its developement. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps below
illustrates
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 the current view of the little town centre
Islip
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 ,and its
likable
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 modification in future. The
down town
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downtown
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 of
Islip
 will be essentially changed by constructing extra shopping,transport and residential facilities. As it is shown in the plan ,there are two
shops
 opposite each other by
main
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road
 . A big space is under the housing. Having
devided
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divided
decided
 into two side roads ,the main
road
 extends to the school in the West and
park
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the park
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 in the East.
Contryside
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Countryside
 occupies the whole empty room beside the
shops
.
Currently
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Islip
 main plot is not busy enough and comfortable for car travelling.
Contraversary
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Controversy
 to
plain
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the plain
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 plan of
Islip
 nowadays ,
the
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further
 planned development is crucial . One main
road
 will be replaced by
the
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a
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 dual carriageway for better linking all the necessary facilities .
Main
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road
 will be replaced by
pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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road
whish
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which
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 allows common people easily
reaching
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reach
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 the
newshopping
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new shopping
 centres ,bus station ,car
park
 and new housing in the North and previously
existed
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existing
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shops
 in the South.
Due to
constructing
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 of a new motorway the size of existed
park
 will be diminished ,
as well as
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the coutryside
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coutryside
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countryside
 will be eliminated. New housing will appear next to
park
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the park
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 and opposite the
shops
 in the North. Ne new modifications will bring more benefits,
attract
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and attract
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 many new residents
due to
 all
new
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the new
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 centres
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Vocabulary: Replace the words islip, shops, road, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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