In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue can be solved?

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There is no denying the fact that

animals

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and

plants

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are the most significant resources for living.

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it is a commonly held belief that the figure of

plants

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and

animals

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is decreasing. In my opinion, I consider that the reasons

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the issue

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two things ,which

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global

climate

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,and hunting.

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with, killing

animals

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In other

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words

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hunting can make

a huge changes

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a huge change

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in the food triangle,

animals

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take up half of the triangle in the system, but when hunters

started

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start

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killing

animals

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the food supplies

are starting

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to diminish.

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, rear

animals

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began to disappear.

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, there was research on the topic, and scientists found that 30% of the rare

animals

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started to decline since the hunters began to kill without knowing the

values

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of these

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, and the solution was to

animals

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protection by putting

the

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them

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animals

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a reserves

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reserves

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. Another point to consider, the global

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is slows

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down the

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. It is

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possible to say that

global

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the global

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climate

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is slows

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down

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plants

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production and

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helps the poisoned

plants

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to appear.

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that

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global

climate

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is dries

plants

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, in

japan

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in 1980 there was

drought

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a drought

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in rice

and

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apply

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, that

cost

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caused

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food destruction among the Japanese and until now

the

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apply

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scientists

did

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have

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not

find

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found

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the

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solution to

solve

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apply

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this

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problem. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that If all the people knew about

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issue it

will helps

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to decrease

the

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apply

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hunting and the global

climate

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Task response

The introduction should be clearer and provide a more concise thesis statement. Additionally, the conclusion should summarize the main points more effectively.

Coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and logical flow. Improve transitions between ideas and sections.

Task response

Elaborate on points with more specific details and examples to illustrate each argument effectively. Ensure you explain how the solutions can be implemented.

Task response

The essay addresses the task prompt and provides reasons for the decline of animals and plants.

Task response

Some relevant examples are used to support the points made in the essay.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

250 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

biodiversity
ecosystem
urbanization
deforestation
agricultural expansion
pollution control
greenhouse gas emissions
renewable energy
sustainable practices
overexploitation
invasive species
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quarantine measures
eradication programs
public awareness campaigns
habitat destruction
climate change
natural habitats
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In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue can be solved?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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