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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.
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The line chart compares the statistics of births and deaths in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. Units are given in thousands.
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, the birth and death rates experienced erratic growth throughout most of the period. Both rates were higher in the latter years compared to their initial figures. Focusing on the number of births, in 1901, just over 20,000 babies were born.
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 number rose significantly, peaking at more than three times its initial value six decades later. Since
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, the
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 fluctuated between 65,000 and 50,000 and declined slowly to around 45,000 births by the end of the century. The mortality
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, started at approximately 10,000 in the beginning.
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rate
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 increased gradually, reaching a peak of nearly 60,000 around 2061, and
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 levelled off for the rest of the period. Notably, the death
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 outnumbered the birth
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 from 2041 onward, with a discrepancy of about 20,000.

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