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The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes. Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes. Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
#amount #tea #coffee #four #countries #tonnes #summarise #informantion #points #comparisons
The provided bar charts
depicts
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depict
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 the imported drinks, which
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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tea
 and
coffee
 from
Canada
, the United States, the United Kingdom and Germany. Units are
measures
Wrong verb form
measured
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 in
tonnes
 or 1,000
kilograms
Overall
,
the
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apply
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imported
coffee
 experienced
a
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an
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 upward trend,
while
 the bar graphs
shows
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show
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the
Correct article usage
a
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 downward trend
of
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in
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 the consumption of
tea
.
However
, the imported
coffee
 and
tea
 graphs have some fluctuations. The rate of imported
coffee
of
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in
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Canada
 and the United States had a minor
different
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difference
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.
Canada
 bought around 39,000
tonnes
 of
coffee
 and the US imported
coffee
 at 40,000
tonnes
,
while
 Germany is the country that consumed imported
coffee
 around 500,000
kilograms
 which is the highest amount among all four
countries
 and the UK
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 the lowest rate at 30,000,000
kilograms
 of imported
coffee
. For
a
Correct article usage
apply
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tea
, the
countries
 that have
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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 consumption rate of
tea
 is the United Kingdom was imported 80,000,000
kilograms
 of
tea
, which is higher than
three
Correct article usage
the three
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 other
countries
. Germany is the second
countries
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country
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 that
imported
Wrong verb form
imports
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tea
 but
lower
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is lower
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 than the UK
for
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by
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a
Correct article usage
apply
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half. Followed by the United
State
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States
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was
Verb problem
has
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 about 21,000
tonnes
 of imported
coffee
 and the
countries
 that bought
tea
 in the
lower
Correct word choice
lowest
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 percentage of all four
countries
 is
Canada
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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around just 20,000
tonnes
 consecutively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, canada, tonnes, kilograms, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imports
  • tonnes
  • volume
  • trend
  • contrast
  • pattern
  • average
  • country-specific data
  • significant difference
  • beverage
  • ranking
  • highlight
  • fluctuate
  • proportion
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