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Large companies use sports events to promote their products. Some people think this has a negative impact on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Big companies
take
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 the chance to market their
product
 in several match
events
 will
give
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have
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bad
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a bad
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 effect
to
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on
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 sports. I do not agree with
this
 statement because the
committee
 already have the minimum standard of the products that
support
 the games and the player will get free products and
discount
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discounts
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. On the one hand, the first reason is the
committee
 of
sport
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sports
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events
have
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has
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the
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a
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 policy which
state
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states
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about
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apply
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the several requirements of products to be the sponsor of the
events
. So, the types
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of product
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product
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products
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 of
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the factory
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factory
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factories
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 should be evaluated and analyzed whether appropriate or not with the theme of sports
events
 because it will be the branding of their event to gain the attention of the visitors to attend the
matchs
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matches
match
.
For instance
, in 2022 , the international football event
such
 as ASIA CUP selected one of
famous
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the famous
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brand
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brands
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 of sportswear namely Adidas to be their official partner of the event.
Instead
 of the company
of
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apply
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Adidas can promote their new stuff to the citizens, the sport even
get
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gets
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the benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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 too.
Furthermore
, the companies provide
support
 to
support
 the
successful
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success
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 of the
events
 by delivering healthy food and beverages to the athletes and the
committee
. After that, several
benefit
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benefits
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 will
achieve
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be achieved
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 by the player and
committee
such
 as fresh money,
discount
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discounts
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 and free
product
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products
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.
For example
,
energy
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an energy
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 drink called
pocary sweat
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Pocary Sweat
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 will deliver a thousand of
their
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its products
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product
 to
support
 the drink for the match.
To conclude
, I
do
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apply
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firmly disagree because
between
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apply
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the games and the big company have a good mutualism symbiosis which will
get
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apply
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advantages
each
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to each
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 other.
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