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Large companies use sports events to promote their products. Some people think this has a negative impact on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Big companies
take
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 the chance to market their
product
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 in several match
events
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 will
give
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bad
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a bad
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 effect
to
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on
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 sports. I do not agree with
this
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 statement because the
committee
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 already have the minimum standard of the products that
support
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 the games and the player will get free products and
discount
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. On the one hand, the first reason is the
committee
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 of
sport
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sports
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events
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have
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has
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the
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a
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 policy which
state
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states
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about
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apply
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the several requirements of products to be the sponsor of the
events
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. So, the types
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of product
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product
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products
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 of
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the factory
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factory
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factories
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 should be evaluated and analyzed whether appropriate or not with the theme of sports
events
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 because it will be the branding of their event to gain the attention of the visitors to attend the
matchs
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matches
match
.
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, in 2022 , the international football event
such
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 as ASIA CUP selected one of
famous
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the famous
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brand
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brands
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 of sportswear namely Adidas to be their official partner of the event.
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 of the company
of
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apply
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Adidas can promote their new stuff to the citizens, the sport even
get
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the benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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 too.
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, the companies provide
support
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 to
support
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 the
successful
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 of the
events
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 by delivering healthy food and beverages to the athletes and the
committee
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. After that, several
benefit
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benefits
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 will
achieve
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be achieved
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 by the player and
committee
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such
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 as fresh money,
discount
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discounts
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 and free
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product
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products
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.
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,
energy
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an energy
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 drink called
pocary sweat
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Pocary Sweat
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 will deliver a thousand of
their
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its products
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product
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 to
support
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 the drink for the match.
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, I
do
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apply
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firmly disagree because
between
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apply
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the games and the big company have a good mutualism symbiosis which will
get
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apply
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advantages
each
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to each
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 other.
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