Large companies use sports events to promote their products. Some people think this has a negative impact on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Big companies
take
the chance to market their Wrong verb form
taking
product
in several match events
will give
Verb problem
have
bad
effect Correct article usage
a bad
to
sports. I do not agree with Change preposition
on
this
statement because the committee
already have the minimum standard of the products that support
the games and the player will get free products and discount
.
On the one hand, the first reason is the Fix the agreement mistake
discounts
committee
of sport
Change the noun form
sports
events
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
the
policy which Correct article usage
a
state
Correct subject-verb agreement
states
about
the several requirements of products to be the sponsor of the Change preposition
apply
events
. So, the types Change preposition
of product
product
of Fix the agreement mistake
products
Correct article usage
the factory
factory
should be evaluated and analyzed whether appropriate or not with the theme of sports Fix the agreement mistake
factories
events
because it will be the branding of their event to gain the attention of the visitors to attend the matchs
. Correct your spelling
matches
match
For instance
, in 2022 , the international football event such
as ASIA CUP selected one of famous
Add an article
the famous
a famous
brand
of sportswear namely Adidas to be their official partner of the event. Fix the agreement mistake
brands
Instead
of the company of
Adidas can promote their new stuff to the citizens, the sport even Change preposition
apply
get
Change the verb form
gets
Add an article
the benefit
benefit
too.
Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
Furthermore
, the companies provide support
to support
the successful
of the Replace the word
success
events
by delivering healthy food and beverages to the athletes and the committee
. After that, several benefit
will Change to a plural noun
benefits
achieve
by the player and Wrong verb form
be achieved
committee
such
as fresh money, discount
and free Fix the agreement mistake
discounts
product
. Fix the agreement mistake
products
For example
, energy
drink called Correct article usage
an energy
pocary sweat
will deliver a thousand of Correct your spelling
Pocary Sweat
their
Fix the agreement mistake
its products
product
to support
the drink for the match.
To conclude
, I do
firmly disagree because Verb problem
apply
between
the games and the big company have a good mutualism symbiosis which will Change preposition
apply
get
advantages Verb problem
apply
each
other.Change preposition
to each
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