The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
This
graph illustrates how is the contribution of
population
and
wealth
divided per region from around the world. There is a huge difference between the number of inhabitants and economic power in several regions. In North America, they only contribute around 5% of the total society, but in the economic sector, they have approximately 35%
share
of
wealth
.
This
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similar situation is happening in Europe and
Rich
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the Rich
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Asia-Pacific region too. In Europe, the
population
share
is the biggest compared to North America and
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the Rich
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Asia-Pacific, it is 15% more or less;
nevertheless
, there are only 5% of the
population
share
in
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the Rich
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Asia-Pacific.
On the contrary
, even though Cina and India have the biggest
population
share
, it contradicts
to
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their
wealth
share
. For China itself, the
population
shares are around 23% yet their
wealth
share
are
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only around 3%. In conclusion, there are imbalances in
population
and
wealth
shares that are experienced by these regions.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, wealth, share with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • global population
  • distribution of wealth
  • percentages
  • region
  • Asia
  • Africa
  • Europe
  • North America
  • South America
  • Oceania
  • disparity
  • account for
  • follow
  • despite
  • vary
  • demonstrate
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