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The table and pie chart give information about population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.

The table and pie chart give information about population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.
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The pie chart and table compare the different nationalities in Australia in terms of the
proportion
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 of
population
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 and areas where they live.
Overall
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,
Australians
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 have the largest
proportion
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 and the least
proportion
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 belongs to the
Dutch
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.
Additionally
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, most
Chinese
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 live in the
city
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 and most
people
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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 are Australian.
According to
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 the pie chart,
Australians
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 have the largest
proportion
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, representing 77% of the total
population
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. The
proportion
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 of
British
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people
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 was 7%. The indicators of
Chinese
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 and New Zealand are relatively similar, at 2% for
Chinese
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 and 3% for New
Zealanders
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.
Dutch
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people
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 have the lowest
proportion
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, with 1%. Other nationalities have a 15%
proportion
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 of the total
population
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.
According to
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 the table, 80% of
Australians
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 live in the
city
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. The figure for
British
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people
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 who live in the
city
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 is higher than that, at 89%. The figure for
Chinese
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 is higher than that for New
Zealanders
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, at 99% for
Chinese
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 and 90% for New
Zealanders
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.
Moreover
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, 83% of
Dutch
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 live in the
city
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. Turning to the countryside
population
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,
Australians
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 have the largest
proportion
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, at 20%. The proportions of
British
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 and New
Zealanders
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 are almost similar, at 11% for
British
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 and 10% for New
Zealanders
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. The figure for
Dutch
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people
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 is quite lower than that, with 7%. The lowest
proportion
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 belongs to the
Chinese
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, at 1%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, population, australians, dutch, chinese, city, people, british, zealanders with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 10 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic data
  • population distribution
  • nationality groups
  • urban planning
  • cultural diversity
  • social policy
  • demographic trends
  • rural vs. urban distribution
  • reflect on the implications
  • cultural exchange
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