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The process below shows how to obtain a driving license in the USA

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The
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diagram illustrates the process by which a driving
license
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 is obtained in America.
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it is clear that
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 the procedure begins with registration at the
license
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center
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 and concludes with getting a
license
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, allowing for retaking the written
test
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 in cases of failure after paying a fee. In the first stage, unlicensed drivers should go to the
license
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 and fill out an application form in order to pass the remaining
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 of the process. After completing, an eye
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 is conducted. In cases of failure,
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 person can not enter the following stage.
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, the drivers must take a payment to proceed to two main parts of the examination. The writing
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 of the driving
test
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 is taken once the fee is paid. The individuals who pass the first section are appropriate to take
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 in the second practical
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.
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, those who fail the theoretical driving
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 can retake it for free in two attempts.
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, after successfully completing all stages of the procedure, the individuals get a
driver
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license
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.
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specific examples
You should aim to include more specific details from the diagram to enhance the relevance and depth of your examples. For instance, specify any key timings or additional steps involved in retaking the tests.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ensure that each stage of the process is explained clearly and concisely. Avoid repetition and ensure that each point is covered systematically to maintain clarity and coherence.
overall task response
The overview effectively captures the beginning and end of the process being described, giving the reader a clear picture of the sequence.
logical structure
The logical structure and flow of the essay make it easy to follow. You have clearly delineated the steps involved in obtaining a driving license.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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