The diagram shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

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The two maps illustrate how Central Library has changed over 20 years.

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, the library underwent many significant transformations including the relocation and the new establishment. Having looked at the map for more details, one of the most remarkable changes in the map is that the reading

room

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on the bottom left has been relocated to behind the computer

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moving paves the way for the

room

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which contains CDs, videos, and computer games at the top left. In the past, the adult fiction books’ space was on the left centre of the area.

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, it has been moved to the opposite location.

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, the children’s book

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which was on the upper right corner has been moved to the left side. In terms of new construction, the adult fiction book has been upgraded with modernized equipment. Particularly, self-service machines have been added

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an information desk. In the right bottom corner, the enquiry desk has been replaced.

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replacement allows the construction of a new coffee shop.

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, in the children’s fiction books area, 2 new sofas have been inserted and there are

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story-telling events.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

190 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

floor plan
layout
shelving
reading area
reference section
encyclopedias
dictionaries
circulation desk
transactions
digital media
computer stations
multimedia rooms
café area
social environment
leisure-friendly
expanded reading areas
user experience
comfortable seating
children's section
engage younger readers

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The diagram shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviours. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays online shopping has become more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or negative development?

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The media has become too influential in people’s lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extend do you agree or disagree?