The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.
The
given
pie chart and table illustrate information about the proportion of Verb problem
apply
tourists
in various countries and their different preferences for accomodation
and activities.
A glance at the chart and table provided reveals thatCorrect your spelling
accommodation
,
Europe was the most dominant and Remove the comma
apply
a
plenty of Remove the article
apply
tourists
went to Europe. In Europe, the duration of journeys were
the longest of others. Change the verb form
was
While
, in Asia, the most prominent accomodation
was 5-star Correct your spelling
accommodation
hotel
.
To be more detailed, 35% of visitors were in Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
US
. Correct article usage
the US
US
was the second Correct article usage
The US
popular
one. Asians and other Correct quantifier usage
most popular
tourists
were
the lowest rates which was contrasted by 10% and 18%. As can be seen, American and Asian Verb problem
had
tourists
chose 4-5-star hotel
and for the main Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
activity
they opted Add a comma
activity,
sightseeing
. Asians went on a holiday for 4 days. Change preposition
for sightseeing
On the contrary
, Americans mostly stay for 14 days. Besides
, European
and Replace the word
Europeans
tourists
from other regions were impressed with Camping and Caravan. Average
length of stay of others Add an article
The average
were
10 days. Correct subject-verb agreement
was
Main
activity of other regions was surfing. Add an article
The main
While
,
Europeans preferred Remove the comma
apply
doing
swimming and sunbathing Unnecessary verb
apply
in
their vacations.Change preposition
during
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