The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

The chart and table below give information about  tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.
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pie chart and table illustrate information about the proportion of
tourists
in various countries and their different preferences for
accomodation
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accommodation
and activities. A glance at the chart and table provided reveals that
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Europe was the most dominant and
a
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plenty of
tourists
went to Europe. In Europe, the duration of journeys
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the longest of others.
While
, in Asia, the most prominent
accomodation
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accommodation
was 5-star
hotel
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hotels
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. To be more detailed, 35% of visitors were in
US
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the US
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.
US
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was the second
popular
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one. Asians and other
tourists
were
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the lowest rates which was contrasted by 10% and 18%. As can be seen, American and Asian
tourists
chose 4-5-star
hotel
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and for the main
activity
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activity,
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they opted
sightseeing
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. Asians went on a holiday for 4 days.
On the contrary
, Americans mostly stay for 14 days.
Besides
,
European
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Europeans
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and
tourists
from other regions were impressed with Camping and Caravan.
Average
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length of stay of others
were
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10 days.
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activity of other regions was surfing.
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Europeans preferred
doing
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swimming and sunbathing
in
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their vacations.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourist influx
  • Peak season
  • Demographic information
  • Fluctuations
  • Duration of stay
  • Preferred accommodations
  • Analyze
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Compare and contrast
  • Speculate
  • Marketing campaigns
  • Management
  • Data
  • Notable
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