The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999.

The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999.
The line chart illustrates the number of people who travelled to and from
the
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England, Wales and Scotland in
twenty-year
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the twenty-year
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period starting in 1979. The bar graph gives information about how many
UK
residents
visited the most 5 popular nations in 1999.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there was an increase in visits to and from the
UK
over
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period,
while
France was the most favoured by
UK
residents
in 1999. In 1979, two categories of visitors stood nearly at
same
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level.
However
, approximately in 7 years the number of
residents
who travelled from the
UK
steadily rose and outnumbered the number of people travelling to
this
country. Both
rate
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of tourism to and from the
UK
experienced a significant growth until 1999.
According to
the bar chart, France was the most popular country visited by
UK
residents
in 1999.
This
trend was followed by Spain which
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also
attracted about 10 million citizens.
At
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contrast, Turkey witnessed the
least
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amount of tourists from
UK
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the UK
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.
While
nearly 3 and 4
millions
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of
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residents
travelled to Greece and
USA
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the USA
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, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, residents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuate/fluctuations
  • significant increase/decrease
  • reach a peak
  • hit a low
  • steady rise
  • sharp decline
  • popular destination
  • economic conditions
  • travel regulations
  • cultural factors
  • tourism
  • international travel
  • visitor numbers
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