The table shows data about underground railway systems in siz major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in siz major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.
The present table compares data about the number of data opened,
kilometers
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of
route
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the route
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and
passenger
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passengers
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of subway railway systems which was in 6 different metropolises with
time
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a time
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of
opened
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.
Overall
, the
first
system was in London which had
a
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largest road, but Tokyo had
a
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massive
trvellers
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travellers
.
According to
the chart, London
that
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was the
first
underground founded in 1863 had the largest road with 394 Km;
however
,
in
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the passengers had the third level with 775 million persons. The second ancient metro was in Paris
that
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was
found
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in the
first
year of
20
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centuries
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.
In addition
,
this
city had the second level in two other items respectively 199 and 1191. The third
one
was Tokyo
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was 27 younger than
Parise
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subway
,
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and had 44 rods less than Paris, yet the passengers that transport was the
first
with 1927. The picture shows the fourth
one
was Washington DC
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was nearly 100 years younger than London;
moreover
, the roads were 126, but
this
city was not crowded city because
trvellers
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travellers
were 144. The
last
cities were Kyoto and Los Angeles the
first
one
was established
in
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the end of the
20
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20th
century and was twenty years older than the second
one
;
nevertheless
, railways and people who used underground
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less than
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last
one
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words first, one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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