The table shows data about underground railway systems in siz major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.
The present table compares data about the number of data opened,
kilometers
of Change the spelling
kilometres
route
and Add an article
the route
passenger
of subway railway systems which was in 6 different metropolises with Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
time
of Add an article
a time
the time
opened
.
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opening
Overall
, the first
system was in London which had a
largest road, but Tokyo had Change the article
the
a
massive Correct article usage
apply
trvellers
.
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travellers
According to
the chart, London that
was the Correct pronoun usage
which
first
underground founded in 1863 had the largest road with 394 Km; however
, in
the passengers had the third level with 775 million persons. The second ancient metro was in Paris Change preposition
apply
that
was Correct pronoun usage
which
found
in the Wrong verb form
founded
first
year of 20
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the 20th
centuries
. Fix the agreement mistake
century
In addition
, this
city had the second level in two other items respectively 199 and 1191. The third one
was Tokyo that
was 27 younger than Correct pronoun usage
which
Parise
subwayCorrect article usage
the Parise
,
and had 44 rods less than Paris, yet the passengers that transport was the Remove the comma
apply
first
with 1927.
The picture shows the fourth one
was Washington DC that
was nearly 100 years younger than London; Correct pronoun usage
which
moreover
, the roads were 126, but this
city was not crowded city because trvellers
were 144.
The Correct your spelling
travellers
last
cities were Kyoto and Los Angeles the first
one
was established in
the end of the Change the preposition
at
20
century and was twenty years older than the second Correct your spelling
20th
one
; nevertheless
, railways and people who used underground was
less than Correct subject-verb agreement
were
the
Change preposition
in the
last
one
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