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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The depicted maps illustrate the condition of
harbour
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the harbour
a harbour
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 in 2000 and the developments of today.
Overall
, the current situation of the
harbour
 has changed to hospitality and tourism.
In addition
,
Main
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the Main
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road
 has been built to provide two intersections which are to the north and south
side
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sides
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.
To begin
 with, In 2000 on the north side of
porth
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Porth
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harbour
, the main
road
 connected to the car park which was a shower and towels above and next to it there was a private yacht called Marina.
Next,
there were two ferries with one deck on the edge of
harbour
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the harbour
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 which aligned in the way of the public beach. Now, there are renovated places in
that
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the
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 Marina is converted to fishing boats
while
 decks are added into two to occupy
three passenger
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three-passenger
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 ferries.
In addition
, in 2000 on the south side of Porth
harbour
, the main
road
interconnected
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was interconnected
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 with a car park and fishing boats on the left.
Meanwhile
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at the end
 of the
road
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road,
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 there was a lifeboat.
Furthermore
, there was a castle which was
disussed
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discussed
 and a public beach next to it. Today, the
road
 which is headed to the car park changes to the west with showers and toilets.
Subsequently
,
Marina
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the Marina
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 replaced fishing boats. Along the
road
, there
is
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are
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caffe
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cafes
 and shops adjacent to the lifeboat
while
 there is an additional intersection to the hotel providing a private beach.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure the introduction provides a clear overview of the key changes to set the context for the reader. Additionally, the conclusion should succinctly summarize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs.
logical structure
Use linking words and phrases more consistently to enhance the logical flow between points and paragraphs. This will help in making the essay easier to follow.
task response
The essay addresses the task comprehensively by summarizing the main developments and changes in the harbour.
relevant specific examples
The essay provides specific details and examples of the changes, such as the conversion of Marina to fishing boats and the addition of passenger ferries.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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