Some people say that the academic success of students depends upon the quality of teachers.Others think it depends on the personal commitment and attitude of the students.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education is one of the most important aspects
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,some individuals believe that to
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,
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some argue and
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opinion
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that it is a result of
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support
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view.In
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essay
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I will discuss both aspects and explain why I favour one view. It is undoubtedly true that
teachers
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play a vital role in
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students
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.There are many reasons why they are very special.Most
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,because many
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make them ideals,they try to follow them in their daily routine.
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if the
teachers
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show their potential to help their
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they can overcome many obstacles.For
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instances
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,it is the quality of a tutor to recognise the weakness of their
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and
then
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work on it.
This
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will help to
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them in the future.For
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,many
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have
the
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basic problems in understanding
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mathematics ,if it
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in the beginning ,
consequently
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,it will
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in the future and can pursue it in the future.
Teacher
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Teachers

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can work person to person and could reflect their judgement and
avice
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the
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according to
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their ability.
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,in my opinion
with
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others
that
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it
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can not deny the importance of
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hardwork
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and passion.If
students
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know genuinely their responsibilities and
duty
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than
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there is nothing which can defeat them.It is crucial to understand their own strategy and how to work on it.If any
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from the beginning of their
lives
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show
discilpine
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and punctuality in classrooms they have a higher chance of success because they know how to solve their problems,even though if
teachers
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are not much
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but they can find many solutions and others help to get their goal.Even though ,
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hardwork
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also
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make
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them noticeable in front of the
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and
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they can not say no to help these
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of
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.For
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students
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flousrihing
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in their
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because they strove all the hurdles of life.They
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not stop to learn just because they do not have any
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at home, for
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who can not afford to buy books ,
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used
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thier
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school library and other resources which are not
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to them ,which in turn
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them more strong and
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. In conclusion,we can not deny the importance of
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of
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in our
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but I believe that if the
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have self
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,it is doable just
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some patience and
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introduction conclusion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively highlight the two perspectives while providing a solid thesis statement. However, be sure to clarify the distinction between your own opinion and the discussion of both sides more clearly.
logical structure
The logical structure of your essay is generally easy to follow. Organize paragraphs such that each paragraph focuses on a single main point for easier readability. For instance, the second paragraph could be solely about the importance of teachers, while the third paragraph focuses on student self-motivation.
supported main points
You have provided relevant examples to support your points, but make sure they are concise and directly related to the main idea of the paragraph. This will enhance comprehension and cohesion.
complete response
Ensure that your response is free from small grammatical and spelling errors to avoid losing marks inadvertently. Phrases like 'basic problems in understanding of mathematics' can be more concisely phrased as 'basic problems understanding mathematics.'
clear comprehensive ideas
Your ideas are clear and generally easy to understand. However, improving sentence structure and flow can lead to a clearer presentation of ideas. Example: 'Teachers can individualize their advice based on each student's ability' instead of 'Teacher can work person to person and could reflect their judgement and avice the students according to their ability.'
relevant specific examples
It is evident that you used relevant and specific examples to underscore your points effectively.
complete response
Your essay addresses both views and provides a coherent opinion, which fulfills the task requirements.
supported main points
You successfully highlighted the essential roles of both teachers and students in achieving academic success, adding depth to your discussion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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