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The line graph shows that how much carbon dioxide (CO2) was produced and its average amount per person in four countries, namely, the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.

The line graph shows that how much carbon dioxide (CO2) was produced and its average amount per person in four countries, namely, the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
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The line chart illustrates the average amount of carbon dioxide produced by each citizen of four countries between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 CO2 emissions in UK and Sweden decreased
by
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 time,
while
 these
value
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values
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 in Italy and Portugal saw a steady increase. In 1967, the level of carbonic acid in Sweden stood at just over 8 metric
tones
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, which was the second biggest value among
four
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the four
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 nations. Even if
this
 number sharply rose to nearly 11 in 10 years, after that it dramatically dropped to almost 50% in
following
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the following
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one
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decade.
Subsequently
, Sweden witnessed a steady decline to 5 metric tonnes of CO2 gas
,
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 and finished the specified period as the lowest
producers
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producer
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 of harmful gas.
In contrast
,
United
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 Kingdom, which was the first in
level
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the level
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 of production of carbon dioxide at the beginning of the period, gradually fell
for
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three-fourth
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three-fourths
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 in 40 years
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 but still was the leader
in
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 the end of the given period. Regarding
to
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other countries, the quantity of carbonic gas in
Portudal
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Portugal
 and Italy was approximately 1 and 5 metric tonnes in 1967 respectively.
Following
this
, both empires experienced a significant growth in these values,
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 a
result
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 ended the interval with the number of 7 in Italy and 6 in Portugal in 2007.
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