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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of the shares in Swiss watches by six

companies

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from 2020 to 2021.

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Rolex

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was the dominant supplier in both years.

Rolex

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increased its dominance,

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the other decreased

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stock in 2021. the three biggest

companies

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produced in 2020 were

Rolex

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, Omega, and Cartier with 39.5%, 15.6%, and 14.5%, respectively.

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while

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Rolex

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increases its shares the other two

companies

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decline in 2021. Despite the minor decreases from 14.5% to 13.08% in 2021, Cartier replaced Omega as the second-highest company share in 2021. The other three competitors

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had around 10% in 2020 each, but all declined in 2021 to around 5%. Petek witnessed the largest dropping from 10.5% in 2020 to 8.88% in 2021. From the three smallest

companies

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, Audemars Piguet went from the smallest company in 2020 to the fourth largest company in 2021, achieving around 9%.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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145 words

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