The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of the shares in Swiss watches by six
companies
from 2020 to 2021.
Overall
,
Rolex
was the dominant supplier in both years.
Rolex
increased its dominance,
while
the other decreased
this
stock in 2021. the three biggest
companies
produced in 2020 were
Rolex
, Omega, and Cartier with 39.5%, 15.6%, and 14.5%, respectively.
However
,
while
Rolex
increases its shares the other two
companies
decline in 2021. Despite the minor decreases from 14.5% to 13.08% in 2021, Cartier replaced Omega as the second-highest company share in 2021. The other three competitors
,
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had around 10% in 2020 each, but all declined in 2021 to around 5%. Petek witnessed the largest dropping from 10.5% in 2020 to 8.88% in 2021. From the three smallest
companies
, Audemars Piguet went from the smallest company in 2020 to the fourth largest company in 2021, achieving around 9%.
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