The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
The bar chart illustrates the data of men, women and children
ate
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who ate
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five portions of fruit and vegetables daily in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, the number of women is at its highest
percentage
than other group .
In contrast
,
least
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the least
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children
throughout
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apply
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ate fruits and
vegetable
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vegetables
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in
this
period.
Additionally
, all
group
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groups
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of people
significant
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significantly
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raised over the period. In
further
detail, there was
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a considerable
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considerable
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considerably
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raised during the period 2001 to 2006 in the
percentage
of
female
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females
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consumed
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who consumed
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fruits and vegetables, from more than 15% to about 38%
that
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apply
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reach
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reached
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a peak figure of all time, before
dropped
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dropping
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slowly to 30% in the final year.
Furthermore
, the
percentage
of
male
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males
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who ate fruit and vegetables started
just
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at just
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17% in 2001. The amount
than
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then
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growth
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grew
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to over
than
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apply
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25% in both 2006 and 2007.
After
this
year, the
percentage
of men
reduce
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reduced
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to about 26%.
Similarly
, the
percentage
of children shared a similar trend as
number
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a number
the number
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of
male
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males
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, which increased slightly to about 25% in 2007 and dropped to 23% in 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • portion
  • consumption
  • trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • stability
  • public health campaign
  • awareness
  • socio-economic factors
  • health implications
  • daily intake
  • nutritional habits
  • dietary guidelines
  • public policy
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