The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
The bar chart illustrates the data of men, women and children
ate
five portions of fruit and vegetables daily in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
Correct pronoun usage
who ate
Overall
, the number of women is at its highest percentage
than other group .In contrast
, least
children Correct article usage
the least
throughout
ate fruits and Change preposition
apply
vegetable
in Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
this
period. Additionally
, all group
of people Fix the agreement mistake
groups
significant
raised over the period.
In Change the word
significantly
further
detail, there was Correct article usage
a considerable
considerable
raised during the period 2001 to 2006 in the Change the adjective
considerably
percentage
of female
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females
consumed
fruits and vegetables, from more than 15% to about 38% Correct pronoun usage
who consumed
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
reach
a peak figure of all time, before Wrong verb form
reached
dropped
slowly to 30% in the final year.
Wrong verb form
dropping
Furthermore
, the percentage
of male
who ate fruit and vegetables started Fix the agreement mistake
males
just
17% in 2001. The amount Change preposition
at just
than
Correct your spelling
then
growth
to over Replace the word
grew
than
25% in both 2006 and 2007. Change preposition
apply
After
this
year, the percentage
of men reduce
to about 26%. Wrong verb form
reduced
Similarly
, the percentage
of children shared a similar trend as number
of Change the article
a number
the number
male
, which increased slightly to about 25% in 2007 and dropped to 23% in 2008.Change to a plural noun
males
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