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New stories on tv and in newspaper are very often accompanied by pictures. some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this?

#stories #tv #newspaper #pictures #people
In
this
 contemporary era, the way of presenting
news
 on
tv
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 and in
newspaper
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newspapers
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 has changed
alot
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a lot
 than
past
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the past
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. Many journalists use various
images
 which may show the exact meaning of the topic. Even, critics say that
this
 is the most common and easy way of presenting something rather than a page of writing but some believe that
pictures
 are not actually needed on the posts. In my opinion, both outlooks are quite important and for that
reason
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images
 can be helpful and unneeded. First of all, people pay attention to the
pictures
 when they look
on
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at
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 the pages of
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
magazine
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magazines
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 because they utilise at least
first
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the first
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 five minutes to make
decision
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a decision
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what
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about what
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 topic they should read or not.
In addition
, visualization is the best way to
intract
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interact
attract
anyone
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with anyone
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 towards reading. Some parents and schools provide newspapers and
magazine
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magazines
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, where
news
 and current affairs are described in the form of
pictures
 which not only enhance their interest in reading,
also
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but also
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 assist them tremendously
to compete
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in competing
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 in the entrance tests in future. To quote an example, one of the New
York's
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 once posted
a
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the
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 same story with
pictures
 and without
pictures
 with
the
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 difference of two weeks. When the survey was conducted by them they found that the story with graphical representations was read ten times more as compared to the other.
Hence
, it is proved that
images
 play
crucial
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a crucial
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 role
while
prestenting
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presenting
 any
news
 on
tv
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TV
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 or
newspapers
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in newspapers
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.
Conversely
, the trend of making false
news
 by showing animated
pictures
 has
effected
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affected
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 people's
life
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lives
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 to a great extent. The
renowed
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renowned
renewed
 celebrities have to face many problems in their personal life
due to
 false
news
 created by
media
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the media
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.
Apart from
this
, some of the documentaries do not need any kind of picturization as it is believed that words are louder than anything.
For instance
, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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famous novels are printed without including any effective
image
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images
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 but still insist readers
to
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read and teach them virtuous lessons. So, it is not always essential to use
pictures
 in new stories because the words have
power
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 to
demonstate
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demonstrate
 the meaning of everything. To recapitulate, both the views
has
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have
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 their own importance and drawbacks.
Images
 and drawings are more productive than written data. In fact, it depends on the choice and interest of humans.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay structure is clear and logical. While your ideas are in place, they tend to jump from one to another without smooth transitions.
task achievement
Strive to use more sophisticated vocabulary and vary sentence structures to make your writing more compelling and articulate.
task achievement
Proofread your essay to correct grammatical mistakes and improve the flow of sentences. For instance, 'changed alot than past' should be 'changed a lot compared to the past.'
task achievement
The essay demonstrates a balanced view by discussing both the benefits and drawbacks of using pictures in news stories.
task achievement
You provide relevant and specific examples, such as the survey conducted by the New York newspaper, which adds depth to your argument.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing your discussion well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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