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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication that some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The
Internet
 is an important part of everybody’s daily life around the world.
While
 others have an idea that it is not adequately good for communication or gathering
information
 I completely agree with
this
 view.
To begin
 with, it is very clear that in today’s world, life is much easier and faster with the
internet
 which gives us a cheap and available method of communication between people.
Moreover
, it develops every day and can be used with various devices so it can be available anywhere.
Furthermore
, you can research easily any subject in the
information
 super highway and use all the updated
information
 without spending much time.
Also
, you can immediately be informed
from
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of
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 the news from all around the world. You can almost do anything online
such
 as shopping, paying the bills or watching TV too.
On the other hand
, some think that online research is not reliable because all the
information
 available on the web is not correct and cannot be trusted.so you have to choose credible sites to get true data. Social media is another use of the
internet
 that in some cases can’t be good for children
for example
 if teenagers visit sites that don’t have suitable content for them net can be harmful too. In conclusion, except for
afew
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a few
 problems that the
Internet
 can have, In my opinion,
this
 system can be very beneficial in different cases,
while
 others think that it is untrustworthy
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines both perspectives before stating your opinion. This can help set a clearer stage for your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Try to spend a bit more time developing your conclusion. Summarize the main points to reinforce your argument.
coherence cohesion
Use clear topic sentences and transitions to make the structure more logical and easy to follow.
general
Make sure to eliminate minor grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for a smoother read.
task achievement
The essay includes a clear opinion and provides arguments to support it.
task achievement
Examples such as online shopping, paying bills, and watching TV help illustrate points well.
coherence cohesion
The overall organization of the essay is clear and makes sense.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Democratize access
  • Instant messaging
  • Real-time conversations
  • Credible sources
  • Misinformation
  • Unverified facts
  • Reputable news outlets
  • Biased opinions
  • Algorithm-driven content
  • Overreliance
  • Traditional methods
  • Search engines
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