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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The bar graph
comapres
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compares
 the various types of transportation by individuals for work in one European city in three different years,1960,1980 and 2000.
Overall
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,
use
Correct article usage
the use
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 of every transportation
modes
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mode
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 changed over
the
Correct article usage
apply
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time.
To begin
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 with,
popularity
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the popularity
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 of
bus was
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buses
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 in 1980 was 20 and
then
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 increased to the peak position
to
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of
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 27 in 1980 and
then
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 popularity decreased at the lowest position to 17.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modes of transport
  • public policy
  • urbanization
  • lifestyle changes
  • technological advancements
  • environment
  • city infrastructure
  • popularity
  • comparison
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • data
  • figures
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