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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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An illustration depicts the lifespan of one kind of butterfly called Monarch butterfly. The cycle started when the butterfly
move
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moved
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 to the north to lay eggs.
This
 happened when two butterflies met, which
will
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apply
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consequently
lead
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led
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 to
produce
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the production of
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a new Monarch butterflies
Correct the article-noun agreement
a new Monarch butterfly
new Monarch butterflies
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. The process
started
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starts
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 when the butterflies
mirage
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migrate
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 to the
nourth
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north
, to meet and lay
aggs
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eggs
 on milkweed,
this
stage
called
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is called
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egg
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the egg
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stage
. After 14 days, the larval
stage
 started when eggs started to
hatched
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hatch
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 to make the larval
goes
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go
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 out the
egge
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edge
egg
.
On
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At
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this
stage
,
caterpillar
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the caterpillar
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 started to move in the milkweed, until it
attached
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was attached
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on
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to
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 it. The pupal
stage
startes
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started
starts
 after 10 days with
lavral
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larval
labral
 beings inside something called chrysalis for 10 days.
Thereafter
, the adult
apeared
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appeared
 from
chrysalis
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the chrysalis
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 to have
new
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a new
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 Monarch butterfly that
will
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would
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 travel to the south and after 6
mounth
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month
months
 the process
commences
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would commence
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 again.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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