The bar chart below shows the information of the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did frequent physical activity in 2010

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian

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Males

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and

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females

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in different age

of

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apply

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group

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groups

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practicing

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practising

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regular physical activity in

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the year

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period 2010. Units are measured in percentage.

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, men were the higher in doing

regular

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a regular

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physical activity

then

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it

start

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to decrease to the lowest point,

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, it

bairly

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barely

fairly

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increase

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again but not like the first figure,

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,

female

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females

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were lower

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then

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men in doing

regular

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the regular

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physical activity than it starts to

increase

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and been steady till it drawback again. At first

glence

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glance

, men were higher with 52.8%

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it fell down to 42.2% and drawback

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39.5%,

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, it starts to

rose

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till it reaches 43.1%,

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, it slightly

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increase

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increases

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in the two figures with 45.1% and 47%

respectivly

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respectively

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the other hand,

female

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females

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were lower

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47.7%

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it

starts

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started

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increase

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with

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48.9%,

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, it

rise

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rose

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again

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52.5% reaching

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peak

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53%,

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, a slight decrease

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53% and

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after that it fell down with 47.1% to be near with the proportion of male.