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: The pie charts below describe the electric energy production a major source of energy in the US. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts

: The pie charts below describe the electric energy production a major source of energy in the US. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts
The graphs illustrate
distribution
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the distribution
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 of
main
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the main
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 sources of
power
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 to produce electricity in the United States in 1980 and 1990.
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, it can be seen that the consumption of oil and natural gas decreased,
while
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 nuclear
power
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 and coal increased their popularity over time. In 1980, oil was the most favoured source of energy
by
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making up 42% of total depletion and did not lose its position even after 10 years.
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 trend was followed by coal, which outnumbered crude oil as the second most used source of
power
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 and accounted for more than
one quarter
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 of
whole
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the whole
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. Natural gas saw a slight
fell
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 in popularity and made up 25% in 1990. Regarding other types of fuels, the hydroelectric method of collecting
power
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made
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 up
the
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 same percentage of 5 for
given
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a given
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 two years.
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, the amount of energy produced by nuclear
power
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 witnessed an increase of 50%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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