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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Automated
vehicles
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 are more likely to dominate the streets in the near future, with only passengers inside without any drivers needed. There are some advantages and
diasdvantages
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disadvantages
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 issue and I believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. On the one hand, it is agreed that automatic
vehicles
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 are more convenient.
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 is because it enables people to do their priorities,
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lead
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 a meeting or
conduct
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a
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training, rather than driving.
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, the technological structures developed in
autocars
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auto cars
 will prevent accidents caused by human error.
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, smartcars enable the utilization of smarter technology which can be effectively used for detecting malfunctions earlier. To illustrate, it may provide alarms for the users when
its
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 time to repair the brake.
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, one significant drawback of driverless
vehicles
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are
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 the insecurity of passenger's data privacy. There are potential risks of data privacy leaks of its users
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 hacking or phishing by a group of hackers, especially in countries with low IT infrastructure quality. An outstanding example of
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 is the information related to its
passengers
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passenger's
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home
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homes
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 or
workplace
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workplaces
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 day by day, which may lead to unwanted email advertisements or even more dangerous things like thefts or crimes.
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, the cost of obtaining automatic
vehicles
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tend
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 to be more expensive, since the cost of importing
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 cars to the country, specifically to developing countries, will be higher
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 tax.
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, several countries might face bigger problems following the rise of driverless cars,
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 in fact,
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type
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types
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 of cars are not the current urgency of the country, particularly in high-populated nations. In conclusion, I personally think that the advantages, like convenience and smarter technological development, could not outweigh the disadvantages
on
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of
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 having it,
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 as data privacy leaks and much higher prices compared to conventional
vehicles
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task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments, especially regarding data privacy concerns and cost implications.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is generally clear and easy to follow, ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly from one idea to the next to enhance cohesiveness.
general advice
Watch out for minor spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'diasdvantages' should be 'disadvantages'). Consistent attention to detail will improve your overall clarity and professionalism.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear and well-structured introduction and conclusion, which provides a strong framework for your essay.
task achievement
Your main arguments are clear and generally well-supported, showing your understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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