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It is true that hunger worldwide still
persist
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despite the fact that there are many developments in
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agriculture.
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reasons for
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scarcity is because of
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and
also
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conflicts
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within the nations and
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there are few
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available for
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causes
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as sustainable agricultural practices and cooperation from
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organization
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. One of the reasons people face
food
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shortage
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is because of
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.
Climate
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variety and extreme weather events
such
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as
flood
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,
drought
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and storms can severely impact
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productivity. Small-scale farmers, who do not have
resources
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to adapt, are particularly vulnerable.
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,
due to
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prolonged drought, some countries in Africa face famine. Not only that, the other reason is conflict. Regions involved in
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and
politic
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instabilty
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can often face
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production shortages. To be
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, civil wars and
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can
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the
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agriculture
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activities, population displacement and hinder humanitarian aid.
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due to
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the Israel-Hamas war, millions of people are
at
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the brink of famine
because
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no access to
food
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. Addressing hunger requires
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approach. Government should promote sustainable agricultural practices to enhance
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to
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, conserve natural resources and improve
food
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productivity.
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can implement new rules to regulate the use of fertilizer, which can reduce the soil quality and fertility and
thus
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reducing
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the
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food
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productivity if used excessively. In
additon
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, cooperation and coordination among
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, NGOs and international
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is
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crucial for
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food
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scarcity and ensuring equitable access to
food
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resources. In conclusion, there are
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reasons for
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distruption
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as
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and
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within regions and can be solved with
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sustainable agriculture developments and inter
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural advancements
  • Economic disparities
  • Food distribution
  • Post-harvest losses
  • Storage facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Climate change
  • Crop yields
  • Political instability
  • Food production
  • Poverty
  • Financial resources
  • International aid
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Government policies
  • Food security
  • Resilient agriculture
  • Education and awareness
  • Subsidies
  • Accessible food
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