The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph gives information about the average monthly temperatures in

Paris

Dubai

and

Sedney

Correct your spelling

Sydney

in 1 year.

Overall

, the average

temperature

Dubai

and

Paris

showed

incraesing

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increasing

gradually in

beging

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being

beginning

of the

preriod

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period

, but

decrease

Wrong verb form

decreased

show examples

Change the preposition

show examples

the end of the period.

However

, Sedney showed a

decrasing

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decreasing

trend and

incrase

Correct your spelling

increased

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show examples

the end of the period. In January, the

temperature

Fix the agreement mistake

temperatures

show examples

Dubai

and

sydney

Change the capitalization

Sydney

show examples

were nearly 20 and 25

celcius

Correct your spelling

celsius

respctively

Correct your spelling

respectively

. By March the

temperature

Dubai

overtkaen

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overtaken

Sydeny and

incerase

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increased

gradually and

recach

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reach

reached

the highest

temperature

by almost 37

celcius

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celsius

in August. The

temperature

of Sydney

Decreasing

Wrong verb form

Decreased

show examples

gradually and

reach

Wrong verb form

reached

show examples

the

Change the word

its

show examples

lowest point

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show examples

almost 14

celcius

Correct your spelling

celsius

in July. By December, the

temperature

Dubai

meat

sedney

Correct your spelling

Sydney

Sidney

by around 23

celcius

Correct your spelling

celsius

. In January, the

temperature

Paris

Was 5

celcius

Correct your spelling

celsius

and

increasing

Wrong verb form

increased

show examples

gradually and

reach

Wrong verb form

reached

show examples

the

Change the word

its

show examples

highest point in July. Between July and August the

temperature

paris

Change the capitalization

Paris

show examples

riamend

Correct your spelling

remained

stable, after that showed

Correct article usage

a deraesing

show examples

deraesing

Correct your spelling

decreasing

trend and back to 5

celcius

Change the capitalization

Celcius

show examples

in December.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words paris, dubai, temperature, celcius with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 4 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
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33Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

163 words

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties having enough sleep what are problems caused by lack of sleep? what can be done about this lack of sleep?

In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problem is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this?

Economic progress is one way to measure the success of a country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than economic progress?

Some people think companies should employ old people to work as they have a lot of working experience. Others, however, think it is better to recruit young people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A faction of people hold(?) the notion that employment in(?) not necessary if there is a stable income. I totally agree with this opinion as ample reasons to substantiate it. This essay will explain my view with relevant illustrations.