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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the average monthly temperatures in
Paris
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,
Dubai
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 and
Sedney
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Sydney
 in 1 year.
Overall
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, the average
temperature
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 in
Dubai
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 and
Paris
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 showed
incraesing
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increasing
 gradually in
beging
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being
beginning
 of the
preriod
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period
, but
decrease
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decreased
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in
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at
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 the end of the period.
However
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, Sedney showed a
decrasing
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decreasing
 trend and
incrase
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increased
in
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at
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 the end of the period. In January, the
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temperature
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temperatures
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 in
Dubai
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 and
sydney
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Sydney
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 were nearly 20 and 25
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celcius
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celsius
respctively
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respectively
. By March the
temperature
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 of
Dubai
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overtkaen
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overtaken
 Sydeny and
incerase
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increased
 gradually and
recach
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reach
reached
 the highest
temperature
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 by almost 37
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celcius
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celsius
 in August. The
temperature
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 of Sydney
Decreasing
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Decreased
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 gradually and
reach
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reached
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the
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its
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 lowest point
by
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of
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 almost 14
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celcius
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celsius
 in July. By December, the
temperature
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 in
Dubai
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 meat
sedney
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Sydney
Sidney
 by around 23
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celcius
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celsius
. In January, the
temperature
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 in
Paris
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 Was 5
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celcius
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celsius
 and
increasing
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increased
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 gradually and
reach
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reached
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the
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its
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 highest point in July. Between July and August the
temperature
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 in
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paris
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Paris
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riamend
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remained
 stable, after that showed
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a deraesing
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deraesing
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decreasing
 trend and back to 5
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celcius
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Celcius
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 in December.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paris, dubai, temperature, celcius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 4 times.
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