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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the average monthly temperatures in
Paris
,
Dubai
 and
Sedney
Correct your spelling
Sydney
 in 1 year.
Overall
, the average
temperature
 in
Dubai
 and
Paris
 showed
incraesing
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increasing
 gradually in
beging
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being
beginning
 of the
preriod
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period
, but
decrease
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decreased
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in
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at
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 the end of the period.
However
, Sedney showed a
decrasing
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decreasing
 trend and
incrase
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increased
in
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at
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 the end of the period. In January, the
temperature
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temperatures
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 in
Dubai
 and
sydney
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Sydney
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 were nearly 20 and 25
celcius
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celsius
respctively
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respectively
. By March the
temperature
 of
Dubai
overtkaen
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overtaken
 Sydeny and
incerase
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increased
 gradually and
recach
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reach
reached
 the highest
temperature
 by almost 37
celcius
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celsius
 in August. The
temperature
 of Sydney
Decreasing
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Decreased
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 gradually and
reach
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reached
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the
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its
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 lowest point
by
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of
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 almost 14
celcius
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celsius
 in July. By December, the
temperature
 in
Dubai
 meat
sedney
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Sydney
Sidney
 by around 23
celcius
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celsius
. In January, the
temperature
 in
Paris
 Was 5
celcius
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celsius
 and
increasing
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increased
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 gradually and
reach
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reached
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the
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its
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 highest point in July. Between July and August the
temperature
 in
paris
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Paris
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riamend
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remained
 stable, after that showed
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a deraesing
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deraesing
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decreasing
 trend and back to 5
celcius
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Celcius
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 in December.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paris, dubai, temperature, celcius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 4 times.
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