The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.
The two pie charts give information about
rates
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adult
people
use to
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watch
tv
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TV
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in Canada in
years
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the years
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2009 and 2019 .
Overall
,
in
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the
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beginning
of the
period
, the
rates
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rate
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of
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an adult
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adult
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adults
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watching
in
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conventional
TV
was the highest
while
,
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the tablet
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tablet
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tablets
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was
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had
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the smallest rate.
In contrast
,
at the end
of the
period
, the
rates
of grown
people
watching
in
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conventional dropped dramatically and became the lowest, at the same time flat-screen
tv
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and mobile
phone
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phones
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become
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the largest. In 2009, the
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rate
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adults
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of adults
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watching
on
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convenional
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conventional
TV
was 34% and the
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rate
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plummetd
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plummeted
plummet
at the end
of the
period
and
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became
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the lowest rate at 4%.
However
, by the
beginging
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beginning
of the
period
, the
rates
of grown
people
watching on
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a lapttop
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lapttop
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laptop
laptops
and desktop
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computers
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were at 20% and 18%
respectivley
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respectively
. By 2019 the percentage of
adult
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adults
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watching on laptop and desktop
computer
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computers
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were
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decreased slightly and
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became
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12% each. The
rates
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rate
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of
people
watching on
tbalet
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tablet
was
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the
loewst
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lowest
at 5% in 2009,
by
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and by
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the end of the
period
beome
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before
become
the
the
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therid
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third
most
use
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used
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. In fact, in 2009 the
rates
of grown
people
watiching
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watching
on mobile
phone
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phones
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and flat screen
tv
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TVs
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were 15% and 8% respectively. By 2019 the
rates
of
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adults
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watching
in
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on
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the
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mobile
phone
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phones
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and flat-screen
Tv
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TV
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were the highest at around 27% each .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, adult, people, tv, period with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • 18 to 25 age group
  • devices
  • watch television
  • Canada
  • comparison
  • shift
  • preferences
  • mobile devices
  • traditional televisions
  • technological advancements
  • television viewing habits
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