The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

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The line

chart

compares the numbers of

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visitors

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the

in 20 years period, and the bar

chart

gives information about common

countries

visited by

residents

in 1999.

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visits

aborad

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resident

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the period. We can

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see France

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the most

visted

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visited

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countries

counties

residents

in 1999.

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the line

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, in 1979, around 13

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abroad, the number jumped by 1999

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almost

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, at the

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of the period, 10

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overseas

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, the number

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slightly and

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reached

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in 1999. Looking at

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countries

visited by

residents

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, we can see France

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pupular

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around 11 million

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residents

. Almost 10

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Spain the second most

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USA

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, Greece and Turkey

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Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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