As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

To begin
with, majority of the people use the
internet
for some purposes
such
as
a
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business or personal. Business owners are seeking on
relevant
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topic that may impact for their business from
internet
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the internet
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.
For example
,
in
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every morning, Restaurant owners tend to find out commodity or rice prices on the market to calculate
for
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its
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their
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pricing.
Moreover
, for
personel
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personal
personnel
, celebrities or
artist
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artists
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allow
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are allowed
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to produce video or written
information
at one platform which cannot be found before 2000 which use both newspapers and television.
In addition
, humans
are need
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simplest
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way to find out and give some
information
. Only by using the smartphone, they can access everything that they
curious
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about. Not only find the
information
, but they
also
may
posting
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news/
information
that
happen
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in their environment.
For instance
, someone will
travel
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travels
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to another country should book their flights and hotels, find out local
restaurant
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restaurants
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, and so on. To overcome all of these things, using Google or
travel
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application will help them easily and know exactly
for
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the
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certain
information
.
Thus
, newspapers will
replaced
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by the
Internet
in the future.
To conclude
,
Internet
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has become more popular because
certain
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of certain
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advantages
such
as
easy
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being easy
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to access wherever you are and giving
a types
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types
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of
information
for those people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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