Some people believe that it is good to hare as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals advocate that
information
about scientific research, business and academics should be available worldwide (should be widely available) whilst some maintain that it should remain concealed because it is too valuable and important to be revealed. Both schools have merits, but I believe that sharing data freely
encourage
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a more synchronized
world
. On the one hand, in
modern
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welfare system, having individual copyrights play a crucial role in creating a competitive environment. By exposing
to
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oneself to
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this
environment, one could enhance creativity and stimulate their
desires
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desire
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to surpass others.
For instance
, restaurants that follow their own traditional recipes or scientists with technological innovations will encourage other brands to create their own formulas
and
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resulting in
ultimate
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an ultimate
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benefit
of
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consumers. Not only that, history and political national academic journals possess original characteristics to contribute to the development of a diverse society.
On the other hand
, publishing research in the scientific
fields
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have
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has
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a lot of benefits. Researchers and
scientist
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scientists
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traditionally struggled to communicate
to
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with
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citizens
due to
lack
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the lack
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of transportation and restrictions imposed by governments and religious organizations. But,
however
, with the aid of social media today, people are more aware of the state of the
world
.
Therefore
, their contributions can enhance technological advancements and
a more synchronized educational
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more synchronized educational information
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information
worldwide. In the business
world
, it requires years of experience to succeed in
the
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this
field.
Therefore
, entrepreneurs need to learn from
written
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the written
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works of previous
businessman
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businessmen
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to gain economic insights. In
conclusions
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,
although
information
about
scientifics
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scientific
, business and academics should be restricted
but
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I truly believe that sharing
information
would definitely
benefits
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a lot of people in synchronizing the
world
.
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