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The diagram below shows how the australian bureau of meterology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a University lecturer describing information shown below.

The diagram below shows how the australian bureau of meterology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a University lecturer describing information shown below.
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The diagram explains
about
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the process of collecting
information
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of
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 the Australia Bureau of Meteorology to produce reliable weather forecasts.
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, There are four steps in the diagram
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that started
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started
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with collecting
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, analyzing data, preparing
information
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 and publishing the result of weather forecasts by three media.
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 the first and second
stage
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, there are three ways of collecting data and three ways of analyzing it.
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, incoming
information
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 from satellites can be directly presented for analysis as a satellite photo or, through passing the collected data to
radar
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 stations, as a
radar
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 screen or synoptic chart.
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, the same
information
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 may immediately be collected by
radar
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 stations and presented to be analyzed on
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radar
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a radar
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 screen or synoptic chart.
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, a drifting buoy can only provide
information
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 in the form of synoptic charts. At the next stage of the process, all of the analyzed and forecasted weather
information
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 is prepared on a digital computer.
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, it is published on TV (presented by forecasters), on the radio, or as a recorded telephone announcement.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words information, radar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 7 times.
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