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Percentage of students giving good ratings for different aspects of a university

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The given table indicates the consequences of enquiries about one college in three varied times -2000,from 2005 to 2010.The results are given with the percentage.
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,it is obvious that the technical quality,print
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 and electronic
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 are experienced with the increasing ,
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 the range of modules offered are witnessed with the decreasing and building/teaching facilities remained stable . One of the most striking
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 of
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the electronic
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 and print
resources
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 are voted by many students ,88% ,they are considered the highest indication among others.But the print
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 rose
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moderately over the given periods,
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 the electronic
resources
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 went up dramatically.The opposite
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is true for the range of modules offered because of its diminishing.It amounted to 32%,lessened slightly and reached
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27%.The proportion of building/teaching facilities did not change in ten years and experienced
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the same result,77%.
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task achievement
The essay mostly addresses the task requirements but can be improved by giving more specific examples or details. For instance, instead of just mentioning that 'print resources rose up moderately,' specify exact figures or more details on the trend.
coherence cohesion
While the essay does have an introduction and conclusion, the introduction could be clearer. Consider rephrasing it for a smoother start. For example, 'The given table illustrates the percentages of students who gave good ratings for various aspects of a university over three different periods: 2000, 2005 and 2010.'
coherence cohesion
Work on linking your ideas more smoothly. Use transitional phrases like 'In addition,' 'Moreover,' or 'On the other hand' to improve the flow between paragraphs. This will help in maintaining better coherence throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes an overall summary, which is a strong point. It helps to provide a clear snapshot of the data trends before diving into the details.
task achievement
You effectively highlight the key trends in the data, such as the rise in electronic resources and the stable nature of building/teaching facilities. This shows a good understanding of the task.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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