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The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
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The table and pie chart provide key information about the source of the police's
budget
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as well as
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 how that
money
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 was distributed for the years 2017 and 2018. The units are measured in millions and percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the total
budget
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 was considerably higher in 2018.
In addition
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, salaries accounted for over half of the
money
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 spent,
whereas
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 technology represented a much smaller proportion.
According to
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 what is shown, the
money
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 that came from the local taxes was a significant growth with 11.1m.
In contrast
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, there was a slight increase in the
money
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 that came from the other sources with just 0.5m.
Budget
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 from Local taxes witnessed a modest growth from 91.2
m
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 in 2017 to 122.3m in 2018. In terms of the way of distribution, building and transport used 17% of the
budget
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 in both
ratio
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ratios
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Moreover
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, the ratio of the
money
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 that was spent on technology rose about 6%,
while
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 the one that was spent on salaries soared from 75% to 69.6%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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