The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
The bar chart depicts
number
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a number
the number
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of international students of three
University
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Universities
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categorise
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categorised
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by
country
.
Overall
, the ranking of
country
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the country
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in
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a
the
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number
of
enrolmental
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enrolment
enrolments
students
remain
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remains
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the same for all these three
university
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universities
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and
University
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the University
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of
riverview
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Riverview
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always
have
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has
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the highest
number
of
student
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students
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from every
country
shown in the diagram. India, which
have
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has
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the most
enrolment
student
, has more than 7000
student
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students
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enroll
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enrolled
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in
University
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the University
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of
Riverview
followed by 6000 and 5000
in
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at
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Smithtown
University
and Ealwood
University
respectively.
On the other hand
, Colombia has the lowest
number
of
enrolment
student
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students
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from all three
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Universities
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University
,
which
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of which
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only
University
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the University
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of
Riverview
is
Verb problem
has
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nearly 1000
student
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students
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. For ranking of the
country
, the highest
number
of
enrolment
student
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students
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is India followed by Nepal, Vietnam,
Indoesia
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Indonesia
and Colombia and the highest
number
of
enrolment
is always
University
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the University
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of
Riverview
while
the ranking 2 and 3 are very competitive
have
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and have
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approximately the same amount in Colombia, Indonesia and Nepal
while
Smithtown
University
win
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wins
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over Earlawood
University
about 1000 in India,
vise
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vice
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versa in Vietnam.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, university, country, riverview, student, enrolment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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