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In many countries formal exams are used to assess students’ ability and to judge the success of their education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using formal exams to assess students’ abilities? Do you think the benefits of using formal exams overweigh the drawbacks?

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Formal assessments are being held in various countries to evaluate the efficiency and proficiency of
students
 in their educational journey.
While
such
exams
 have their own methods of
assessment
, they come with their own set of benefits and drawbacks.
This
 essay explores the advantages and disadvantages
for
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 utilising formal
exams
 worldwide and how
benefits
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the benefits
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 outweigh the limitations. Formal
exams
 help the
students
 in diverse ways. They offer an objective and are standardised as they use the same set of
criteria
 on which
students
 are critically evaluated. When the student doesn’t get the result in a particular
assessment
, he tries to improve himself;
hence
, these
exams
encourages
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 improvements in
students
.
This
 motivates them to perform more effectively, efficiently and diligently
and
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thus
 getting desired results. Even though these
assessment
criteria
 are beneficial for
students
,
however
, they have certain limitations
also
. A major drawback is examinations
leads
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 to more stress and anxiety among
students
 as they check the ability of
students
 to perform in a particular
test taking
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 environment.
Secondly
, Even if the
students
 are street smart, they are being tested on the basis of their bookish knowledge, which is not appropriate because it encourages rote memorisation and learning for
exams
 among
students
. In
the
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light of
this
 evidence, it is undeniable that incorporating other diverse
assessment
criteria
such
 as
project based
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project-based
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 examinations and oral examinations would allow
education
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the education
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 system
in
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more
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a more
the more
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 comprehensive evaluation of
students
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students'
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 competencies.
Additionally
,
this
 would encourage critical, analytical and creative thinking skills among
students
 and help them to develop life skills
such
 as
team work
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, cooperation and team spirit. In my opinion,
benefits
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the benefits
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 can outweigh the drawbacks, only and only if the
assessment
criteria
 are used in an appropriate and suitable way.
Therefore
,
Education
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 system should pay more emphasis on conceptual understanding rather than rote learning.
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task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific countries or educational systems that use diverse assessment methods.
task achievement
Clarify and expand on some points. For example, explain more thoroughly how project-based exams and oral exams can benefit students.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen the links between paragraphs for better flow. Use transitional phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,' or 'However,' to enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. This will improve the logical structure and help with coherence.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes clear and concise introductory and concluding paragraphs, which effectively frame the discussion.
task achievement
The response successfully addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of formal exams.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized with distinct paragraphs that each touch on specific points related to the main topic.

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